Losing Control

Jonathan Zegarra

Today I have temporarily moved into Ellie’s new house as John’s son is staying for half term. With it being the kids’ holidays I also have more hours at the cinema and this is all coinciding with the deadline of my first TMA (Tutor marked assignment).  Trying not to get stressed! I have used the focus point ‘losing control’ for the theme of my assessment and this inspired me to use my experience of mental illness for the free write. When it actually came to writing the story though, I decided to write fiction and make up something unrelated to my experience. I came up with this:

Jenny took a sip from a can of cider and threw her head back laughing, “I can’t wait!” she enthused and passed the can to Tom who was sitting next to her in the back of Gerry’s Ford Fiesta. She looked out of the window and watched as the lights went flashing by in time to the Speed Garage music that was blasting out of the stereo. Kooky Jane in the front passenger seat drank vodka from a china teacup and kept the crew laughing with her hilarious dance moves and witty banter. Kirk was sat on the other side of Tom and was sulking. He wanted to take ecstasy that night but they hadn’t been able to get hold of any. “cheer up” laughed Jane. “Have some vodka” she thrust the teacup towards his face and then promptly spilt vodka on all three of them as Gerry went over a bump in the road. Jenny yelped as cold vodka went on her bare legs and Kirk just glared at Jane. “He’ll be alright once we get in the club” said Tom. “Yeah maybe we’ll be able to get some pills in there.” Mused Kirk. “I should think so, it is Speed Queen.” Said Gerry. “Yay! make sure you get some for me!” sang Jenny. “Yeah for all of us” said Tom. “Ok let’s get this car parked up” said Gerry as they approached the road of the club. In the queue Jenny and Jane shivered in their shiny hot pants and sparkly tops with just furry boots to keep them warm. Once inside, Kirk went off on his mission while the others headed straight for the bar. “Vodka red bulls all round?” asked Tom. “yes please” they chorused, dancing around to the incredible funky house music. Once they had their drinks in hand, Jenny led the others to the dance floor and was absorbed into the electric atmosphere as high energy tunes boomed out of the system. This was her favourite place in the whole world to be. Everyone around her was smiling and dancing, she could feel the love in the air. After a while, Kirk appeared grinning his head off. He kissed Jenny right on the lips and she laughed, shocked and asked him “you found some pills then?” “No, but I did get some mushrooms” “mushrooms?” “Yeah”  “I’ve never taken them before” “well then you are in for a treat. Let’s go and sit down”. They headed for the chill out area and said hi to some familiar faces before finding a corner to sit in. “Yuk!” Jenny made a face and quickly washed them down with Vodka and red bull. “Oh my God, I love this tune!” she screeched as Kings of Tomorrow’s ‘Finally’ beautiful vocals came flowing from the speakers. She jumped up and ran to the dance floor, leaving Kirk behind. She closed her eyes and got completely lost in the sound. A sample of Madonna’s Into the Groove came blasting out and the energy on the floor turned up a notch, people were cheering and whooping. Jenny waved her arms in the air and two men grabbed each hand and pulled her up to the podium. She didn’t realise she was tripping at first then images started to move around. She felt the bass booming in the pit of her stomach and the music became her. She saw Tom in the crowd and called to him. He turned and just in time was able to catch her as she launched herself off the podium. “What are you doing!?” he exclaimed. “I feel amazing! This is the best night of my life!” “You need to be careful, you’re not invincible you know”. “Don’t bring me down Tom, come and dance” Tom gave in and smiled at her, “Kirk gave you some mushrooms didn’t he?” “yeah! Did you have some too?” “no, I don’t like hallucinogens. Bad experience on acid a few years ago.” “Oh you’re missing out Tom, these are really good.” “Nah I’ll pass thanks” he grinned as a huge robot came up to them and started pulling some funky dance moves. Jenny laughed and laughed. She couldn’t stop laughing. Tom had to carry her off the dance floor as he was worried she was going to hyperventilate. Jenny screamed at him. He had turned into a hideous creature with maggots crawling out of his eyes. She looked around – the whole club was full of snakes.

What do you think? I’m not sure of the ending description. I’ve changed it three times already. I quite liked the idea of everyone else turning into terrifying beasts. What do you think? Let me know in the comments below. Deadline is Thursday!

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